Feedback on Pitch:

Pitch Feedback:

I have had some feedback on my pitch form two guys at the Cambridge Cinema Shorts and my teacher in Media. There were some points that were raised that could improve the idea. 

Points that were raised:

• Carry out a sit down type of interview instead of filming Ray whilst he is doing his job throughout the night. 
• Another point that was mentioned was to film some other workers at the dairy and not to just concentrate on Ray.
•  I could also go out and film Ray whilst he isn't filming and see what he gets up to with his family and in his free time. 
• Overall, the points that were raised could add improvements to the idea and possibly make a better documentary film.